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when i met sky alone (Other) by Prince of Void

4:00 am inside.. scene of death the chilly breeze of dawn on the cold face of life when i met sky alone silence deserted .... and the poem has never been written .. [part one ]

lmp 3-Jan-06/3:15 PM
i will wait for the other parts before voting, but so far it feels a bit disjointed: first two lines read like an opening scene for a overly-dramatic "private-eye" novel, then it becomes personal and ethereal.
the next two lines lead me to believe your neighbors made too much noise for you to finish writing...




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