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Half Hearted (Free verse) by elderking

Taking half hearted chances at loving once more. With half tried romances, I'm left wanting more. Your arm length embraces, I'm allowed just so close. A loving heart races, while ours reach "almost". These pleasures, half tasted, amount to not much. Our kisses are wasted, Our hearts are untouched.

Dovina 3-Jan-06/11:48 AM
The rhymes seem mostly unforced, and the first verse is good. Verses 2 and 3 add little to the meaning, and they flow less well.




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