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Not for Me (Free verse) by TLRufener

Alone and cold Your warmth So far away Eyes that never see Ears that never hear A heart the never beats Not for me My words fall deaf Even when I speak They mean nothing To anyone but me

zodiac 27-Dec-05/8:57 PM
A heart THAT never beats.

Interesting image, words falling deaf. When most people would say words fell mute, or words fell on deaf ears. Seriously, why don't you try saying what YOU, DancingShamrock, mean, instead of saying what a million people before you meant? I think you would do better that way, is all.




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