zodiac22 Dec 2005

Strong lines:

"She likes the ocean, it's in her form"
"carnivourous and kind"
"so voracious it's death sometimes"
"curves sing like the sun"
"My wish is to depart in this light"
"I want to be scorched by this"

The rest needs to be like those, and not so, you know, overindulged narrator. Also, carnivorous and definitely are misspelled. And / is not a real punctuation. -8-