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When god manifested (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

She likes the ocean, it's in her form Her way of moving with the eyes of the ones who seek her approving, carnivourous and kind So perfect and flawed, hungry and full inciting a craving so voracious it's death sometimes It destroys me once a day and it never lets me forget, she knows I don't forget Pretense falls at her feet and the moon begs at her slightest glance, and I definetely forget Losing the slightest sense of ever having known I fall to my own overindulged narrator the words haunt the logic in my core Names and places/ beauty and whores nothing, no, no one, somehow I'm never alone hiding in her soft cell, the curves sing like the sun, the arches follow the path of what I imagine only divinity could forge Nothing can take this from me, no one can touch what I have kept for her inside my deepest vein I find myself here, lost and perpetually discovering I will never know My wish is to depart in this light, on this path until I can burn like that I want to be scorched by this, I want to be perpetually dying to feed this fire grow blind to the dark, and explode forever only to be one with this, one with her

cyan9 22-Dec-05/4:30 AM
Would have voted 10 if it were not for the line "the words haunt the logic in my core", the words logic and core break from the rest of the poem a bit too much. If I am going to knitpick, the first few lines sem to meander nowhere, making a less enticing start to an excellent poem.




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