Niphredil17 Dec 2005

I find the rhythm a little bit stilted.
The well-defined rhythm of these four lines:
"I’ve read this before,
Time and again;
But I can’t seem to find
Where this nightmare ends."

doesn't quite seem to match the rather asymmetric last line of
"I have lost myself
To a savage beast.
I can’t run fast enough
To escape their carnivorous feast."

A little fixing-up would make the poem flow more smoothly, in my opinion.