poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on I Remember Thinking by BrandonW.

nentwined13 Dec 2005

How in the hell did I get here?
What in the hell am I doing?
I knew I shouldn't have gone to see you!
How could I do this?

-- I don't like those lines. I'm thinking up to that point, the piece might be okay if it were a bit more breathless.

You pretty much completely lost me after that.