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Bri's Room (not done) (Free verse) by Sunshine Conkey

A little girl named Bri had an awful lot of stuff she saved and saved it but it wasn't enough. She put it in a closet and stacked it on the floor But even when her room was filled She wanted more and more. One day while playing She wanted her special pen to draw her favorite doll. But after looking everywhere, she couldn't find them at all.

LilMsLadyPoet 12-Dec-05/9:03 PM
This reminds me of some childrens poetry. The premise is cute; I know a Bri, who is a bit of an artist with stuff everywhere. But, that said...even childrens poetry should not be mundane...keep working at it and you'll have something of quailty to give them!




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