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Observer (Free verse) by Dovina

I observe a mind with facets watch its anger swell and dwindle see its joy flap high, then flounder inhale a smile while passions kindle Detached and free to lend critique I watch an actor come of age capture each new scene in wonder can’t wait to turn the page Through all, I do not tamper play moralist or God for that would cut my pleasure and make this poem a wad

Dovina 11-Dec-05/3:00 PM
I admitted I am not excellent in everything. Why do you say, “DOVINA: I'm excellent.”?

In deference to your sensibilities, I would change one sentence in my response to DA. I would change “Congratulations on your feeling of moral excellence” to “Congratulations on your determination of moral excellence. The next sentence, “You must feel very content in that knowledge.” I would not change.

As for standing apart from my angry self, it takes discipline and practice. You should try it.




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