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Observer (Free verse) by Dovina

I observe a mind with facets watch its anger swell and dwindle see its joy flap high, then flounder inhale a smile while passions kindle Detached and free to lend critique I watch an actor come of age capture each new scene in wonder can’t wait to turn the page Through all, I do not tamper play moralist or God for that would cut my pleasure and make this poem a wad

Dovina 10-Dec-05/3:21 PM
As an observer of myself, I do not divorce myself from responsibility. How could you be so naïve as to deduce that? “Condemnation. Punishment. Lowliness.”? How on earth do you gather such conclusions from a person observing herself? Whether you mean them as recommendations or observations doesn’t matter. The observer within me does not “pat herself on the back.” You score 0 for 3.




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