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Observer (Free verse) by Dovina

I observe a mind with facets watch its anger swell and dwindle see its joy flap high, then flounder inhale a smile while passions kindle Detached and free to lend critique I watch an actor come of age capture each new scene in wonder can’t wait to turn the page Through all, I do not tamper play moralist or God for that would cut my pleasure and make this poem a wad

zodiac 9-Dec-05/11:26 AM
From a poetry standpoint, I'd simply make all these verbs past tense and fix the rhythm in the last half. Otherwise, good - from a poetry standpoint.

From a morality standpoint, as corrupt as ever.




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