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Hope (Free verse) by sliver

In the midst of my sorrow, At the bottom of the vale, With the cold December falling I somehow stumbled on a trail. I am still convinced In just a few more frozen breaths Without that symbol in the snow, That night would have been my death. But somehow that ribbon Barely visible in the shifting snow Gave me everything I needed Just a little bit of hope. (It's been so long since I wrote anything I thought I'd better spit something out before I rust shut.)

cyan9 8-Dec-05/6:51 AM
Nice + quaint pleasurable read, good image with the symbol in the snow. It lacked a bit in language and didnt do anything with rythm or flow but otherwise quite nice.




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