cyan96 Dec 2005

I think perhaps due to lack of clarity on my part you are likening this and "Dark's Nest" to metallica songs since they use repetition and simple dark vocabulary; however if you care to look, there is a lot more going on in these than an expulsion of anger to a few grinding riffs, and I think you have missed this. In order to express the picture as I wish to express it, the piece needs to contain each of the concepts involved. The only verse that is of extra length is the last, and this is to exaggerate the final nature of the last line; I would not consider reducing this in size. I have found haku's and short poems cute, but generally they provoke only one idea, and are over before you have had a chance to get into reading the piece, so you are advocating that style to the wrong ears (unless you can come up with examples that will allow me to reconsider)