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Thespian (Haiku) by BrandonW

You didn't make me. You sure as hell let me though, let me make believe. Let me make believe. There could really be something, between you and me. Between me and you. I'm glad I found out so soon, you were an actress. You were an actress. Who did not make me believe, only make believe.

zodiac 6-Dec-05/2:05 AM
Yeah, okay. Now drop the periods in the first lines of stanzas 3 and 4, the commas in the second lines of stanzas 2 and 3, and rewrite all of this so it's as good as stanza 4.




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