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saving myself for marriage (Haiku) by Venus

teasing proud and high ripened cherry on its stem... broken starfish cry

Zoe 5-Dec-05/8:12 AM
A haiku is supposed to have three things:
1. A clear image
2. A clear emotion
3. A clear philosophical message

The image is not so clear to me as it seems to be two images - maybe you need to stick with the cherry image. The emotion seems to be hiding sadness with pride. But what is the philosophical message?




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