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I'm walking thorough void (Other) by Prince of Void

I'm walking thorough void My steps are soundless What's left behind? It's turning into way its pace less In final thoughts I became breathless In this eternity destiny is worthless In this moment everything is nameless Death has no dominion What you have learnt It's useless in the depth of staring void Darkness I'm in is fearless Because it fills this empty universe My voice is voiceless Due to words became meaningless Slowly I'm getting faceless Because my identity has been questionable When I've seen things unspeakable My existence My sin {love} My sense They're endlessly traceless And my quest for the placeless god It's incomplete in the pathless heart

ALChemy 3-Dec-05/6:17 AM
There seem to be voids in your sentences. I'll assume this is intentional. Good Idea if so but you could have used it more interestingly if you did it in a traumatic story like: I was on a whitewater rapids trip with my-void-bango played-void-unzipped his fly-void-"Say it pig"-void-"WEEEE! WEEEE!




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