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it's damp after closing (Free verse) by hendrimike

there has been a reality hitting me it's coming from a girl that is fitting me she came and went and it kills me she came to see what thrilled me we can all remember the past what is the fate that you look towards when can you give your mouth away when can your love be words that say hold on lover we can both be awake at dawn when the darkness lets up and the thoughts shine through i am just looking through the plague of emptiness and disarray for when can the end be coming near because that is when your fears finally clear i am a man that sees a gal and she shrugs in the light that magnificent sight and the musician in the street he plays the beat with feet tapping against the cold concrete it's been raining in my head but it's starting to clear and the street is illuminated with the glow of fear as you look at me and i to you and in that moment the light shined through

ALChemy 30-Nov-05/7:44 AM
It seems like every stanza is missing a line.




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