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leah (Free verse) by T. Jonathron Remp

never weary again i shall be for she is the fire under my feet and for her i dance the daily dance and run among the others to clear a path for us so that one day, when her fire glows low and my feet grow tiresome we might sit, together and enjoy the hot coals that will endure us beyond our final breath

ALChemy 29-Nov-05/4:27 PM
I guess I could criticize your fragmented sentences too but that would just be anal. Then again maybe anal is your thing.

Why don't you delete your comment again and spend another week thinking up some smart ass thing to say.




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