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The Dreamhole (Free verse) by cyan9

Did you ever swallow, Looking too perfect When twins swiped in And held my soul. Did you ever reap it Running the circuit When twins swiped in, No I don't think so. Did you ever well I never Get yourself together. Did you ever well I never Think it would last forever. Did you ever hurt it Make yourself too perfect When angels dropped in And cleared my soul. Did you ever love it Alone in this bull ring When angels dropped in, Waiting for their hellos. <old one from 2001>

ALChemy 25-Nov-05/10:07 AM
Yeah, I tend to be my harshest critic too. Sometimes people like a good jingle.
The third stanza really sounds familiar,(Some song, maybe a PJ Harvey one or something) I wish I could remember it.




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