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leah (Free verse) by T. Jonathron Remp

never weary again i shall be for she is the fire under my feet and for her i dance the daily dance and run among the others to clear a path for us so that one day, when her fire glows low and my feet grow tiresome we might sit, together and enjoy the hot coals that will endure us beyond our final breath

ALChemy 20-Nov-05/5:45 AM
Do not the burning embers dwindle
in the light of their own lives?
(and yet)
the oldest flames may still rekindle.
This is how love survives.

Line 1 and 8 contradict each other.
Say "I shall be" and then "shall I be" out loud 3 times each. I bet "shall I be" is a little easier to say, huh? It also bounces off the following "for she" better.
Use words we don't hear all the time like "hearth".(bonus points if you can think of a word (not name) that rhymes with "hearth".)

When writing about someone you love say something obscure or secretive like "I still taste the mandarins of our youth"




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