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Love letter (Lyric) by zodiac

Hey bellwether, you've been letting days run by untended-to, when but for wanting some small pleasure I'd have held this ship together. Hey lackadaisy, say, Don't shake the baby, don't break us with light. Now the phone is ringing, the porch door's swinging my back 'cross a blaze of night.

ALChemy 17-Nov-05/9:42 AM
I seem to hear this to the music of "Hey, hey Paula".

I see the initial story but can't help but wonder if you haven't deeply hidden one your sly metaphors into the body of this poem.

The last line is about the closest thing to a jingle I've ever seen you post. Which gives me the feeling that the dash out the door has happened more than once.

That's all I got for you so far.




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