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Hypocrites (Free verse) by PawnedTidal

The savages have entered, And conjured this temperamental strain. Here in the depths of darkness Is where I shall remain. They preach a pretty sermon, But really don't give a shit. And if there's one thing I've no use for-- It's a hypocrite. I don't need you or anyone else To try to enlighten me. I'm hip to your scheme, And soon, others will see. Your actions have betrayed your words-- You mouth has overloaded your ass. And, before long, your acts of hypocrisy Will be a thing of the past.

beakism 5-Sep-02/3:06 PM
Indeed. If the poem flowed better, and if it wasn't a rant against parents, I'd enjoy it.




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