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not to settle for less than almost obliteration (Free verse) by ay deee

i went a little too far yesterday there was a fire and i let it burn i wanted consumptive flames but now i can't put it back together without strong glue this happens from time to time the thrill of pushing too hard

richa 15-Nov-05/2:28 PM
If you give the instance you should not have to state the theme, it should be obvious.

Pushing too hard is not the best word choice to describe letting a fire get out of control.

Put 'it' back together; the only 'it' in this poem is the fire.

Strong glue to fix something that is burnt is unapt.

I like the rest of it though. It has a decent spine.




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