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the battle for troy (Free verse) by oneglove

my love the beauty that launched a thousand ships and as each vessel left the harbor they sailed carrying a piece of my heart that it may lead them to you a compass always pointing towards true love and that you may be drawn to it a beakon to guide your journey though they sail to fringe of map you are but an illusion yet to be found and i still lay at home with just enough heart to keep me breathing and it is here i will wait till i can hold you and my heart can be restored once again

ALChemy 14-Nov-05/2:49 AM
Then say "true north". The smart ones among us will figure out you mean true love. If you're going to plagiarize then at least say it right, "the FACE that launched a thousand ships". Although decently worded your poem is awash with cliche after cliche.




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