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Steak and Satin (Free verse) by Dovina

Tiny pearl earrings, delicate and black, concealed in flowing hair. Dainty ankle bracelet, almost hidden in lacy folds of broomstick skirt. Moving curls, tickling shoulders, induce seductive smile. I slip a shoe, slide a foot on side-calf soft, slither a hand to sense neat shape of knee. My little secrets. Sitting straight and proud, wearing nipples as jewelry, sensual, alone, with maybe a watching eye.

Dovina 4-Nov-05/4:23 PM
Predictable,in line with the pattern. Thanks for the demonstration.

Look, all I ask is that when we have a discussion, you stick somewhere near the opening topic. You usually pick up on some side issue, and get so stuck to it that you won't even listen to my suggestion that we get back on track. It's so easy to criticize on issues like wording and implications that your comments on them are hardly worthy of rebuttal. Anybody can find a little flaw and magnify it. The harder and more constructive thing is to stay with a topic.




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