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An Allegory to No One
(
Free verse
) by
MacFrantic
Here I will reveal a forest Thin, fibrous trees Twisting beneath a suburban canopy The sharpness of the landscape Obscures my dancing vision Here too we are animals still This stage So grey and deep Sheltering players Loud, foreign things
Dovina
28-Oct-05/9:33 AM
How can you reveal this? And suburban conopy doesn't work for me. "Loud foreign things" does.
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