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Creatures That Crawl To Me (Free verse) by D P Robertson

Caverns of creatures crawl over my soul These creatures they come to me In waves they wander In gnawing In snarls In my dreams Knotted in gnarls Are these creatures that crawl to me Gather your ghosts on liquid graves Poltergeists parade for me In waves they stumble In horror Insane In my dreams They look the same As these creatures that crawl to me Slithering fear of shuddering dread Swallows my silent plea In waves I mumble In trouble In fear In my dreams What is now here But these creatures that crawl to me Haunting my home these deathless dead I wake with a start to see In waves they gather In seizure In pain In my dreams They came and came All these creatures that crawl to me These creatures shred a mind long left Shredded by those like me In waves I wonder In sorrow In blood In my dreams Defending love From these creatures that crawl to me Caverns of creatures may crawl to my death Their madness is mine you see In waves they gather United In hate In my dreams As if by fate Kill these creatures that crawl to me Blazing a light on a long black coast Seen from this coal dark sea In waves I swallow In water In help In my dreams Choking in kelp Drown these creatures that crawl to me By David Peter Robertson

ALChemy 14-Oct-05/12:17 PM
Nice stab at Poe like verse but the poem goes absolutely nowhere.
"Caverns of creatures crawl". One too many on the alliteration. You can get away with that more with softer sounding vowels, as in "While I wondered weak and weary". Harder sounding vowels will start to sound like tounge twisters.

Good job staying true with the meter.




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