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Lucky (Free verse) by suejonespoetry

I am trying something new A new style of poetry Writing from the heart and what is inside Rather then rhyming all the time So here is the best I can do And I don’t care what you think Here in Florida there has been some disasters But I am happy still My family is with me And feel sorry for the people with their homes destroyed Something I could never imagine What sorrow they must have! I am sorry! My house stands tall, with the fridge full My family sits with my at dinner And go to bed in a warm house Our roof doesn’t leak Hardwood floors to boot Yes, I am lucky and make it took me this long For me to realize it

jessicazee 14-Oct-05/1:04 AM
Omit the 1st 3 stanzas, they don't matter for for real writing out loud; after that, very good --- keep expressing that tough, genuine voice. Don't let your wallflower alter-ego write prefacing disclaimers for your really right-on, deadpan visions that speak for themselves. good job. 8.6




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