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My Name Is (Free verse) by hottemper26

Today my name is dreamer, lost and clueless. Yesterday my name was crying, helpless and trapped. During the storm my name is free, like the tears the sky cries. Underneath the stars my name is wind, floating with no direction yet down the right path. In my dream my name was romance, running away with the shadow of the night. Tomorrow my name will be faith, ready to take on whatever adventure comes my way.

Tintagiles 23-Sep-05/4:17 PM
I'd break it up into line/indented line. Like this:

Today my name is dreamer,
Lost and clueless

It would probably make it a bit better. Not much, but a bit.




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