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my friend beth we wear (Free verse) by jessicazee

the same size pants about the scar I swear you told me I heard about the carnival your boyfriend is married not that much fatter tomorrow I’ll pay you back don’t matter again don’t forget what I said don’t tell anyone that light turn it off okay that song was fucking great I just forgot I gave you a ride write your number on this napkin I will remember the time what time my shoe is under that over thanks my foot is asleep tomorrow call me we’ll figure it out I saw I heard a noise a car where is a match

Dovina 22-Sep-05/2:21 PM
In a flow of thought ramble like this, I still think punctuation is good. Or at least put each thought on a separate line.




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