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First Love (Free verse) by Dovina

The brilliant sunrise Of this winter morning Turned to bright reality of day. I wasn’t winter-broken, I thought it would stay.

INTRANSIT 2-Sep-05/12:16 PM
Deeeeeeeee! please go for the beat and not the look.

....I wasn't winter-broken, though,
I thought that it would stay.

I hate using extra words too but the first three lines
hopscotch nicely.




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