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Jack (Free verse) by Dovina

I was a branch, void of leaves, naked and brittle, adjusted to cold, and could outlast winter. He fell gently on me, like a snowflake, not needed, but warm, like a spring leaf returned, when a leaf must die, yet he rested softly, a repairer of breaches, where no lack I saw, restorer of forgotten paths, creator of places dwell in.

ALChemy 29-Aug-05/4:56 AM
I think a period after "snowflake" and losing the comma after "warm" and "returned" might clarify things.

Is the last line missing a word or maybe "ed" at the end of "dwell".

It's a good little love poem.

Jack is either a rebound lover or Jack Frost?
Hell Jack could even be the dog. But if you were to tell me that Jack was the name of your vibrator I'd piss my pants laughing and proclaim you super-genius.




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