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More Than The World (Free verse) by XOXScottishgrlXOX

I love You more than anything on Earth I have hope and faith in You Because of You Lord I am alive I was put here for a purpose Life will lead me to many places Some will be good and some bad I love You more than the world Everyone has their own problems But because of You Ican get through them No matter what comes my way You are with me You teach me lessons when I have done wrong When I am down I know I can come to You Even though some people don't believe You still love them I love You more than the world

Sasha 15-Aug-05/1:14 PM
I'm going to pick a bone here.

Say "Everybody got their problems" or "We all got our problems" or whatever you feel like.

"They" as a singular pronoun has been used for over a century. There's nothing wrong with writing the English you speak. The only difference between a grammatically "correct" and "incorrect" construction is whether or not it happened to get standardized (and fossilized) when a language was first written down or thereafter. I'm not being ungrammatical by using "you" as a singular pronoun instead of "thou" although many prescriptive grammaticians of centuries past cried that to do so was to vandalize the English language. Therefore to say "We all got our problems" is incorrect is almost as rediculous as saying that Dante really wrote in grammatically incorrect Latin.

Now about the poem, it's bad. It doesen't read like a poem at all but more like a 10 year old's improvised prayer before bedtime. I can't see any way to salvage it. Sorry.




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