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SO LONG MY BELOVED (Free verse) by prettyktm

So long my beloved I'm going to fight A war which isn't mine But a man has got to do His duites you see So save your tears For the better time So long my beloved Thanks for the food Thanks for the wine Kiss me now,kiss me warm 'Cause they'll help me In the winter time And keep me alive in your heart 'Cause I don't know when I've be back So long my beloved Pray for me and for this time Say a prayer for the enemies too 'Cause they're even humans Just like me and you And don't cry when I'm gone Just remember this isn't my war.

MacFrantic 2-Aug-05/10:54 AM
Not too many soldiers pussy out like this, and please don't just repeat in the last stanza what you said in the first stanza. I know it's free verse, but the structuring is pitiful. *4*




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