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After He Left (Free verse) by Dovina

Whether he really went somewhere or where, I couldn't tell. Only his possesseions remain. Perhaps that's why I hord the world in words with hope that when I die the sum suggests a larger life than lived - a healthy afterlife existing after imagination.

MacFrantic 2-Aug-05/10:44 AM
One of the best ending stanzas I have ever read, but the first one could use a bit of work. It makes sense, but the change in tenses and the last line-in the first stanza-is a bit grey. *9*




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