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BreakBeat TimeTravel (Free verse) by nentwined

Breakbeat time travel--on the flip flip flop down skip the heart skips and in- between moments the mind skips between moments; history of the victors lives on-- he lives on long beyond the lives of those in his moments, his moments in- between moments; history and future live on, so malleable, the moments between moments so malleable that the history and future he knows may never have happened though he visits them daily he disavows all knowledge not his, and his changes, time break travel

LilMsLadyPoet 13-Jul-05/2:08 PM
hmmm...made me think...and sounds like lyrics. I am not thoughoughly sure what this is about...well, yeah, I get it, up until the last three lines- seemed to not be part of it, or I didn't get their connection to the entire rest of it. But other than that I like it. Funky rythm I like. It Pops and Snaps like music. Gonna give it a good, generous score.




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