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Ursa's Tail (Free verse) by bamf909

This constellation holds no consolation in its vastness-- bleak vacuum stares open-mouthed at me, swallowing my reflection, reciprocating never. stargazing, many things become one-way streets, paved alongside brilliant flashes, but still I freeze, infrequent streetlamps not enough keep me warm.

Dovina 12-Jul-05/9:55 AM
The first three lines are good, then the image seems to break down.




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