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Lover (Free verse) by Dental Panic

with a bit of bad luck you're in the wrong tube today descending the stairs at the eastside of the river you'll miss your train but you never miss your train it’s the one at seven fifty and you’re lucky there’s a place at the window and nobody in the opposite seat staring at you then you get on a bus the 8 has a stop nearby the 3 departs more frequently which one you choose depends on your mood the weather the shoes you wear a whiff of coffee a cigarette the driver’s face take care

Dovina 9-Jul-05/4:36 PM
It's better now, clearer. Still, the timing of your posting and the tube, river, therain and all implies the London bombings. Then why is it called Lover? And why is it bad luck that he was not on the train that was bombed? Maybe he avoided the train disaster only to get on the bus to be blown up. It's not clear.




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