-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.3 Sep 2002

"Somtimes I feel so un-alive / Like my presence does not survive"... If that doesn't sound 'forced' then I don't know what does. "un-alive"... genius! Anyway, this whole poeme is 'forced'. "I wish I could rewind the time / And turn myself into a chime"... WTF? A chime? You want to turn into a chime? So that people will stop ignoring you? That's a bit obscure, don't you think? Just because 'chime' rhymes with 'time'. It's beak. You beak. Jesu will be very displeased when he reads this. VERY DISPLEASED.