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Born and Fed (Free verse) by Dovina

A calf comes in with urges— get on feet, find a tit, run around. This last, it seems, concerns the calf only for the fun of it, glad and safe, born and fed, worth the effort.

zodiac 7-Jul-05/2:24 AM
"concerns the calf / only for the fun of it," is bumpy. You don't (typically, in any English that's ever existed) concern something for something else in that sense. Unless by concerns you mean 'makes him concerned, worries', and mayhap you do. Anyway, it's kind of like saying "flapping my arms concerns me for feeling like a bird". Do you see what I'm saying?

Otherwise, I enjoyed.




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