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She gracefully walks. A disciplined bearing, she floats across the square. sublimity in sneakers glides into my presence. her face delights in her smile. her eyes hold me. An elegant neck half-turned their ally. eyes shining, ears peaking through hair softer than a night in Wales on the Irish Sea. if I told her every day for a year, would she know I'm at her feet?

DoubleU 25-Jun-05/12:44 PM
>>softer than a night in Wales on the Irish Sea.<<
...Where?
Unless some subtle joke escapes me?

There are nice moments, like line 3 and 4 and 8. But this really calls for good metrics, line 6 jars in that respect. And I don't like the frequent grindings to a halt.




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