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A Righteous Prayer (Free verse) by Dovina

Oh, God, Whom I enthrone Because You meet my needs Grant now my petitions For which I make claim I bring humbly before You All those lofty ideals I’ve kept With passion for religion As tools for advancement As Your Word admonishes I now beseech Not in prayer demanding But in humble knowing I ask in faith, believing Rejecting the hypocrites Who say with their platitudes You’ve outlived usefulness I shall not shrink from asking With a righteous heart From One who gives to those In whom He delights Amen

zodiac 24-Jun-05/7:00 AM
Some of this grammar is a mess. In special need of changing:

"Grant now my petitions For which I make claim"

"All those lofty ideals I’ve kept With passion for religion As tools for advancement"

"As Your Word admonishes I now beseech"




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