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Arson (Free verse) by Roisin

Bridge soaked in alcohol I lit the match finality in view. I saw your face as the blaze began, tears from the heat, eyes half closed. I watched in silence as timber blackened, quivered then fell. You and I previously entwined At once became islands.

Roisin 22-Jun-05/10:10 AM
I disagree. The poem is concerned with separation and the division of two people who have become co-dependent. Your variation destroys this meaning but it would work well as a sacreligious and egotistical defamation of another artists expression. I give it a 2 (fingers up)




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