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Arson (Free verse) by Roisin

Bridge soaked in alcohol I lit the match finality in view. I saw your face as the blaze began, tears from the heat, eyes half closed. I watched in silence as timber blackened, quivered then fell. You and I previously entwined At once became islands.

Blue Magpie 21-Jun-05/10:17 PM
No bad, a little work, and the addition of a few small words could make it better.




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