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Arson (Free verse) by Roisin

Bridge soaked in alcohol I lit the match finality in view. I saw your face as the blaze began, tears from the heat, eyes half closed. I watched in silence as timber blackened, quivered then fell. You and I previously entwined At once became islands.

Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 21-Jun-05/2:09 PM
I liked the first two lines of the 1st and 2nd stanza, and the first line in the 3rd stanza.

"Bridge soaked in alcohol
I lit the match
I saw your face
as the blaze began
I watched in silence as timber blackened."

I give my variation on your poem a -6-




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