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missing pieces (Free verse) by mystic enoch

I gave you my heart. You gave it back. Its all broken. Now I must fix this broken thing. I thought you were the one. Your thoughts werent the same. Some of the pieces are missing! Life is so unfair. Because I miss you. I dont know what to do now. (read my poem FOR THE LOVE OF JOEY. It came first in this story)

DoubleU 17-Jun-05/1:03 PM
Ah, but do I disagree! This one is clumsier than the Joey poem, but the writer at least managed to break away from the dreary 'Boo-hoo-hoo, I love you, Why don't you love me too' mold. Even though only one line manages so: >>some of the pieces are missing!<<




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