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Colorado (Free verse) by Voth269

The wind blowing softly through the trees, Carrying a message for the beholder to see. Along with the wind the river calls out, Bringing peace and harmony to the world no doubt. The mountains look so tame yet so wild, Showing off its beauty for miles. The contrast of colors and diversity of plants, Show the riches of the past.

LilMsLadyPoet 8-Jun-05/9:16 PM
This is only the fifth poem I have read in here...is it just me?! Maybe random is not the way to go...okay...I suggest a comma after 'world', and before 'no doubt'. Do the mountains look wild or tame? could you have elaborated? Could you have painted us a picture? Could you have painted the details of the contrast in colors and textures of plants? I have a suspicion that you could do more and better, if you elaborated, painting a picture with your words.




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