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Swoon (Free verse) by Dovina

Have you ever stood facing east at night, toward City Hall, lighted, Romanesque, your great grandfather’s image in its arches, its dome a breast of his wife, and the man behind you takes your dangling hands, thumbs outward, and pulls them back so you rest on his chest, and his nose nuzzles through long hair, touching your ear, while he includes you in a unique line of womanhood – sensible, respectful, fun – and as he looks past your breasts, they feel proud to be connected with that dome, past with present, and your knees barely hold you, and you belong to him there on the sidewalk, his desires yours, reality dream?

Dovina 3-Jun-05/10:26 AM
“Dangling hands and outward thumbs”: Stand with your hands dangling at your sides. If someone takes your hands from behind and turns your thumbs outward, then pulls them back, what happens? You rest against his chest.

“Your breasts feel connected or do you?”: I feel connected with the women in my past, and the feeling is also in my breasts.

“Unique line of womanhood”: I’m referring to my ancestry, and never thought of the way you‘ve taken it. It’s funny, really!

“The reality dream ending loses me”: It’s a questionable ending for sure. I meant that the reality of the thing he was describing became so overwhelming that it seemed like a dream – a swoon.

“Facing east”: The direction only matters in the specific setting, and I have no right to expect anyone to know that.

Glad you like it heaps anyway.




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