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Structure of a Woman (Free verse) by al-naafiysh

I am a complex structure With no fancy architecture When my architect built me He already knew what I would be I was built to love and understand And to achieve and demand He built me durable and resistant And able to cope with or without assistance Resistant to those who want me to fail And accepting to those who want to see me prevail He built me with the ability to accept what I can not change And to explore what may seem foreign or strange He gave me the gift of Creativity and Versatility Along with Endurance and Humility But I come with No-Warranty Because I am only human So there is no guarantee My lessons will be trial and error And my inspiration will be what I see in the mirror

INTRANSIT 3-Jun-05/6:38 AM
CUT! CUT! Hold it. There's too much unnecessary stuff here. If you want the end-rhyme then GET the end rhyme. But Iron out the lines. Take a T-sqare to them and listen to the beats. You've got plenty to work with.
It's not bad. Just far from what it can be.




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