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honey bee (Free verse) by ThePariahDog

mellifluent voice hums and speaks of labor shared between workers yielding sweet nectar buzzing constantly the drone shows favor for they dance nightly with a prosthetic stinger please savor the taste since i've been replaced

DoubleU 26-May-05/4:42 AM
'Mellifluent' sets off the rhythm of the poem, but right after that rhythm isn't maintained...
I can't place the 'replaced' bit.




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